Oklahoma City Council approves plans for drug and alcohol treatment center
The center would provide medical detoxification for drugs and alcohol, and inpatient and outpatient services. Patient stays would range from seven to 10 days for detox and from four to six weeks for transitional inpatient treatment and outpatient care …
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Hope By The Sea, California Drug & Alcohol Treatment Center, Exhibits At The …
The 2013 Foundations "Freedom and Recovery" Conference opened in Coronado, CA, April 3, 2013, which deals with integrated mental health and addiction treatment for service members and first responders. Hope By The Sea is pleased to be an exhibitor …
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400-bed drug treatment center plan spurs debate in Darby
DARBY BOROUGH — Developers hoping to bring a 400-bed residential drug treatment and job training facility for veterans to an abandoned paint factory on Quarry Street have cleared their first hurdle, winning a variance from the borough's three-member …
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Hope By The Sea, California Drug & Alcohol Treatment Center, Exhibits At The …
The 2013 Foundations "Freedom and Recovery" Conference opened in Coronado, CA, April 3, 2013, which deals with integrated mental health and addiction treatment for service members and first responders. Hope By The Sea is pleased to be an exhibitor …
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Butte Silver-Bow to contract drug treatment
James Reavis, of the Office of the State Public Defender in Butte, said he hopes the transition goes smoothly, because he has many clients who are court-ordered to undergo alcohol and drug dependency treatment. If the new providers aren't prepared to …
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Hope By The Sea, California Drug & Alcohol Treatment Center, Exhibits At The …
The 2013 Foundations "Freedom and Recovery" Conference opened in Coronado, CA, April 3, 2013, which deals with integrated mental health and addiction treatment for service members and first responders. Hope By The Sea is pleased to be an exhibitor …
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State drug, alcohol rehab program changing lives
Eighty state inmates are about to become the first graduating class from the state's drug and alcohol rehab program. The program … It's $ 48,000 to $ 50,000 a month coming into the county to offset our bills here at this facility," explained the …
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Sequestration forces closure of Sitka drug, alcohol treatment center
SITKA, Alaska — A residential drug and alcohol treatment center in Sitka is closing, a victim of federal budget cuts. The Daily Sitka Sentinel reports (http://is.gd/teCu48) the Southeast Alaska Regional Health Consortium announced that it has to close …
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Hope By The Sea, California Drug & Alcohol Treatment Center, Exhibits At The …
The 2013 Foundations "Freedom and Recovery" Conference opened in Coronado, CA, April 3, 2013, which deals with integrated mental health and addiction treatment for service members and first responders. Hope By The Sea is pleased to be an exhibitor …
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Paradigm Malibu, California Adolescent and Teen Drug Rehab Facility …
Paradigm Malibu, a mid to high-end drug rehab center for teen and adolescent boys and girls in Malibu, CA announced this week the launch of its newly re-designed website located at http://www.paradigmmalibu.com. Site development has been underway …
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New drug treatment center to open in Rochester
New drug treatment center to open in Rochester Edie Grossfield Post-Bulletin Company, LLC. A Minneapolis-based chemical dependency treatment center has purchased a building in Rochester and is gearing up to begin operating in Rochester. Minnesota …
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Paradigm Malibu, California Adolescent and Teen Drug Rehab Facility …
A prominent treatment center providing rehabilitation for teens and adolescents with alcoholism & drug addiction in Malibu, California announces the launch of its new, integrative website for parents seeking help. Share on Twitter Share on Facebook …
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Faith programs target drug addiction
MANSFIELD — Members of Richland County's faith-based community and area law enforcement agencies are launching a new nonprofit program aimed at helping people get treatment for drug addiction and other life-controlling issues. Sheriff J. Steve …
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Hope By The Sea, California Drug & Alcohol Treatment Center, Exhibits At The …
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Question by Pretty thang: I need help with my essay?
My name is Rebekkah. i am 30 years old. I graduated from California State University Dominguez Hills with a Bachelor’s of Arts degree in Pschology. Most of my concentration courses were in Abnormal Psychology, Psychology of the Aging, and The Family. My passion is to work with individuals and families that suffer from mental health and conduct disorders, substance abuse, and family violence issues. I believe that treatment must first begin with involving the entire family.
I have five years of experience working in mental health field with a variety of clients.
First, my job experience working as a mentor/tutor with low-income at-risk children introduced me to the mental health field. And as a result of this experience, I am dedicated to pursuing a career in Marriage and Family therapy. I also have worked with clients in a residential treatment facility who have behavioral and emotional problems. These clients need to be in a more structured environment where treatment can help them overcome their behaviors. I have experience in working with clients to set initial goals and a plan to meet his/her goals. SEcond, my experience as a case manager in handling domestic violence cases taught me that there needs to be professions that can be emphathetic to their needs and situations. I believe that I can bring my attributes to your program of being an empathetic person, compassion, and maintaining confidentiality.

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Answer by KnowsEverything773
I’m not entirely sure where your question is, unless you just want feedback on your essay and this is it.

Feedback:
-I don’t know that I would start with “My name is…I am…years old,” etc. I think there’s a stronger way you could phrase that. Eg. “I am Rebekkah, a graduate of California State Dominguez Hills with a Bachelor’s of Arts degree in Psychology.” Do you need to put your age?
-Sentences that start with “I think” and “I believe” are not very strong. Excessive use of the verb “to be” is also risky. For example, in your last sentence, you can probably make it stronger by moving “I believe” to a less important part of the sentence and phrasing it like this: “As an empathetic and compassionate individual who knows the importance of maintaining confidentiality, I believe that I could contribute much to your program.”
-Watch out for spelling and grammar errors, as well as typos. “SEcond, my experience…” <-typo! -Revised sentence: "My passion is working with individuals and families that suffer from..." -Your sentence that starts "And as a result" - drop the "And" and start with "As" instead. -Drop the "First," in "First, my job experience..." -Revised sentence: "I have worked with clients to initially establish individual goals and then a plan to meet these goals." Revised sentence: Drop "Second" and then rephrase, "As a case manager in handling domestic violence cases, I learned that professionals must be empathetic to the various needs of clients and to the situations themselves. Sorry that's all kind of out of order...I just wrote down suggestions as I went through in my weird order, but I hope it helps.

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